Jonah Lomu

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S.O.S: Adjectives,adverbs.

Jonah Lomu

Jonah Lomu is as big and strong as a bull elephant charging through the scrub. He is so tough he played all his games for the all blacks with a kidney disorder. With thighs like thunder that he used to crash over opponents.

His hair is as black as coal and the style is just a little tuft of fuzzy hair. His shiny brown eyes are underneath his heavy black eyebrows with the number 11 shaved on. His lips are as big as a blown up balloon. His teeth are as white as the keys on a piano. He has a big bulky nose to sniff out the next person he will bowl over.  

Gusy's gone bad

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Gusy’s gone bad

“Grrr,” grumbled Gus in a friendly tone, as Jake scratched him above his leg. Gus loved being anywhere where the the sun was, like on the deck, on the concrete and next to the bean bag but his favourite place was by the fireplace.

One day Jake and Maddy came home from school and as they walked past the fireplace Gus was growling at Jake, Maddy and their Mum. Maddy sobbed “ What is wrong with gus, he's gone mad,” “Calm down and go down stairs,” explained Dad. Jake's Dad thought this was such strange behavior because normally Gus was a great dog and he hopes that Gus sharpens his act up.

But Gus got worse and one night Jake's Dad tried to put Gus away but Gus didn’t think he was ready for bed so he growled and went into defensive mode and he got angry. He eventually walked outside but Jake's Dad was so angry so he threw a pillow at Gus, Gus leaped straight back at Jake’s Dad but Jake's Dad slammed the sliding door shut. Gus started attacking the glass. Jake's Dad sighed “I'm glad that wasn't my hand.”

Jake’s Mum and Dad had to decide what to do because you don’t want a dangerous dog inside your house. So they put him outside in the shed. Now they had some time to decide what to do. They came up with an idea, they booked Gus in to get castrated because they thought that would make him less of a grump. But it didn’t work it made Gus grumpyer. He didn’t want to go to bed either and he was trying to bite Jake’s Dad. So they had to make a big hard decision. Jake’s family all said their goodbyes to Gus before Jake’s Dad took him to the vet. Later that day they buried Gus beside the rock in the sun where Jake’s family could visit him whenever they wanted.           

the monkey on a boat

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S.O.S: to use punctuation where it's supposed to be

The monkey on a boat

A long time ago, there was a pet ape named joe but not just an ordinary ape an ape that could talk, that could write and could draw. One day he went missing. He went off on a trip to Monkey Island on a boat with pirates. He jumped on the boat and asked, “Hi nice to meet you all, can i come to Monkey Island ?” All ten of the pirates expressed, “ We would love to have you.” But two of them were nasty pirates and they were planning something evil so they could get joe off the boat. “ The captain's name is Peter,” stated one of the pirates, “ and I think he wants us all to go to bed.”

“Wake up!” Yells peter. “The sail has been set the wrong way, who did this?” “I think it was the little monkey,”  suggested the nasty pirates. “It wasn't me and i'm not a monkey i'm an ape!!!” Screamed joe. “See he's just a vicious little monkey,”yelled the nasty pirates. “We’ll see tomorrow what's gonna happen,”explained peter, “start sailing the boat that way!” “Go to bed monkey, we've got no need for you,”says the nasty pirates. So he went off and cried,cried and cried. But then he overheard them plotting to get him and then the pirates went to sleep.

He got the swords and went into the captain's bedroom and killed him with the swords. Everyone else that night got killed as well. The boat got smashed by the kraken and it took joe to monkey island. Too be continued ...

   

a random story

A Random Story

Sailing through the ocean

Shrek hops on the boat

He lets off a fart

And sets everybody off the boat

Donkey summons moana

Who washes them to mexico

The all chilled out and ate tacos for the rest of their lives.